does this looks good?

[David-fr]

hey macrumors community!

on my business class they ask me to make a business plan and in the business plan we have to come up with a marketing poster..my store is calles Mac-World specializes in fixing macs, iphones and selling european phones. here is the poster, feel free to judge and give suggestions.

 

[David-fr]

grrr!! need help uploading the PDF... how ccan i do it? is too large for macrumors upload

 

[SilentPanda]

Can you take a screenshot of the poster and try that way? All I'm getting by downloading is an invoice...

 

[David-fr]

marketing

here is the pic

 

[jecapaga]

not sure i'm following the apple>pear concept. why is it a pear as opposed to a pineapple or a hippopotamus?

 

[David-fr]

not sure i'm following the apple>pear concept. why is it a pear as opposed to a pineapple or a hippopotamus?

hahah. well my sister watches a tv show iCarly and they used a macbook pro that instead of an apple has a pear...do u like it?

 

[dukebound85]

here is the pic

whats significant about a pear? if its macs, why not keep it as an apple

besides looking cool, i dont see any reason for a pear

 

[spork183]

looks good. Couple usage fixes on the copy:

Get it done, get it fixed.

Have Problems with your Mac?

Luck!

and the pear is growing on me...

 

[jecapaga]

I think it's more than sufficient for a business class project cover. If it were a design class I'd suggest more attention to the typography. Having odd line breaks like Cell
Phone
doesn't lead the eye comfortably. I'd try and keep it all on one line or break it more evenly. Also your main/top headline is the last thing I actually read/noticed. it also has a mistake in sentence. The word should be fixing, not fix. That's a lack of attention to detail that would bother me as an instructor when it came down to grading.

I do like your overall concept of different flavors/fruit contrasting with offering customers different options and solutions. If you did all the photography and pshop work then I'd say that looks nice too.

 

[David-fr]

I think it's more than sufficient for a business class project cover. If it were a design class I'd suggest more attention to the typography. Having odd line breaks like Cell
Phone
doesn't lead the eye comfortably. I'd try and keep it all on one line or break it more evenly. Also your main/top headline is the last thing I actually read/noticed. it also has a mistake in sentence. The word should be fixing, not fix. That's a lack of attention to detail that would bother me as an instructor when it came down to grading.

I do like your overall concept of different flavors/fruit contrasting with offering customers different options and solutions. If you did all the photography and pshop work then I'd say that looks nice too.

thanks for the advice i changed the fixing. english second language sorry for the typo

whats significant about a pear? if its macs, why not keep it as an apple

besides looking cool, i dont see any reason for a pear

copyright! apple suits anyone using the word pod... plus i like the pear i wanted something that a costumer would claim attention to..apple is wayy to use. this business is coming truth one day, and hope that you guys will be my costumers!

 

[jecapaga]

ah ok. english as a second language makes sense for an easy mistake. and btw it's customer, not costumer.

 

[Designer Dale]

A little help with your English.

Try "Get it done, get it fixed. We can do it!" or "Need it fixed? Get it done! We can do it."

Your business is about cell phone and computer repair, so say a little more about cell phone repair in your text.

The image is cute, and the layout has a good start.

Hope this helps without doing too much for you. I'm a student, too.

And don't worry about law suits. If it is student work and does not say anything really bad about the company, it's OK. You get in trouble when you try to make money with someone else's' work. Look at all the people here with the Apple logo in their sigs.

 

[Jim Campbell]

In addition to all the other helpful suggestions, here are the first couple of things that leapt out at me:

Hope that's some help!

Cheers

Jim

 

[Cabbit]

I will chip in here and say don't put the cell phone repair in there stick to one thing and macs are difficult enough to repair without having to learn the 1million+ different cell phones i would make that a foot note.

 

[Brien]

copyright! apple suits anyone using the word pod... plus i like the pear i wanted something that a costumer would claim attention to..apple is wayy to use. this business is coming truth one day, and hope that you guys will be my costumers!

But you're okay with calling a business 'MacWorld'?

 

[JBaker122586]

Apple can't sue you for an imaginary plan proposal for a business class.
Education usually falls under fair use.