Newsletter Critique - Shane

[macgfxdesigner]

This is the company I work for and need some other eyes on this project, comments welcomed! Thank You

Front / Back

Inside Left / Right

 

[Mantat]

Not much to say, other than the colors are very good. The only thing I dont like is the rounded black corner on inside page 2. It doesnt fit there, at least in my eyes

 

[nater.]

I agree, not much to say. it looks really nice. only thing I might try - is add in some blue from the front into the inside.

Im not sure if I like the black corner as well...

 

[Blue Velvet]

In the spreads, knock back the drop shadows on the boxes by 15-30% and maybe in size as well. They're just too heavy IMO... squinting at a page will show you which elements are visually prominent and somehow I don't think the shadows are that important...

Also, adjust your H&Js (hyphenation and justification) for the body copy to allow a little hyphenation in the justified columns, maybe 1 or 2 in a row max. At the moment, you've got bunching up and also white rivers appearing in the type leading to an inconsistent colour.

If the H&J set won't 'read' and hyphenate the ipsum, then try a piece of genuine copy from elsewhere to see if that's working correctly.