Respect the font, and what it's designed to look like. It's supposed to look spraypainted or whatever on some sort of grungy surface, yet it's got massive drop shadows and glowing white. EDIT: Maybe a bit of the white is alright if you grain it up like you have (to look like paint overspray), but definitely not too much of it.
Try to make it silverish, remove all traces of the black stroke and drop shadow/glow, then get a grunge texture and screen/multiply/overlay it over the top part of your cover. Add a slight inner glow to the text, and overall, just do some more stuff to texturize it.
Also, try to make "Body" and "Rentals" the same width (i.e. make "body" as wide as "rentals" by increasing its font size).
Also, soften that black that fades to the yellowish on the top to something more similar to the yellow-green color. Huge dramatic gradients like that usually don't look good for most design purposes.
Sounds like an interesting title, though. But really, just do some tweaks so that people won't judge it so hard by its cover.